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My General Impression:1 .在要点上把握不是很好,这篇文章的要求是:写一篇调查结果介绍, 并陈述自己的观点。因此, 介绍各方的观点和原因是重点, 自己的看法是另一个重点。所以该文章的要点应该是9所以该文章的要点应该是9 -1 0 个: Topic sentence, students opinion, reason 1 , 2, 3, parents opinion, reason 1 ,2 English teachers opinion, reason 1 your opinion, reason 1 , 2.1 0 个Tit2 . 所以在结构上, 文章应该分成五段:1.topic sentence: Recently, we had a survey on whether it is good for high school students to use electronic dictionaries.students: good. a useful tool to study. convenient. save timeparents: good. easy to take. most families can afford4. English teachers: not good. The explanations are too simple 5. my opinion. Reason 1. Reason 22.3.Topic sentence Recently Most of the students think / hold the opinion that Our parents think However, our English teachers think / argue / hold the opposite opinion view that it is In my opinion, As for me, I think As far as I m concerned, From my point of view, Personally/, I agree with the former/ latter opinion.In my opinion, whether . all depends. 3 . 其它结构上的问题:A. 写不写题目要看题目的要求, 一般试卷会有明确要求的, 这篇就不用写, 信件一般都不用。 B . 时态问题: 除了 在Topic sentence里可用到过去时外,在介绍观点并理由时都用一般现在时。在介绍观点并理由时都用般现在时。Common mistakes:1. It 指代不明。E dictionaries are widely used ...but our teachers think itis bad for our English learning. 2. 单词拼写 dictionary , survey , convenient3. 断句4. 书信格式5. 落款写自己的英语名字提醒:在叙述自己的观点时候: 个人观点明确以后,多,两个就够。 但是要具体, 不要太空范! ! ! 模棱两可? 中庸? it all depends? 也得有理有据, 不能笼统。 得强调一下什么情况下是好的观点: If , . make a proper way of ppy Its important 理由不要because破句问题(1) 回答why ? 特殊疑问句, 用because句首。(2) 除此之外, because只做连词用, 一定不可以用在句首。 不能用And、 But、 So作句首 尽量不用缩略形式 注意词序 信息重组 Word choice, 如用research还是survey这类文章武林秘籍: 一定要PRECISE! 个人观点...