高中英语作文示范课之一篇好作文有哪些要素

What does a neat face require? Nice handwriting. What does a complete content require? We need analyze the topic carefully and enough vocabulary. What does a well organized structure require? A good structure: A good writing is usually made up of : 1 a topic paragraph 2 some supporting paragraphs 3 a concluding paragraph Protecting the Environment ① Cars have made the air unhealthy. ② Fortunately, more and more people have realized these problems. ③ Environmental problems are becoming more and more serious all over the world. ④ Trees on the hills have been cut down. ⑤ Pollution is threatening威胁 our life. ⑥ I hope the problem will be solved in the near future and our home will become better and better. ⑦ We can find rubbish everywhere. Topic sentence: Supporting sentences: Concluding sentence: ③ ① ② ④ ⑤ ⑦ ⑥ 4、Linking words衔接词 1.表结构顺序： Firstly/ First, Secondly/Second And then, Finally, In the end, In a word, At last 2.表并列补充： Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, not only but also 3.表转折对比： However, but, On the one hand On the other hand , as for, so that 4.表 因 果 关： Because, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result 5.表总结： In short, In a word, all in all, in brief Good afternoon, everyone! The topic of my speech today is My Attitude to Pursuit of Fashion in School . Now in our school there is a hot pursuit of fashion. Some students live a very expensive life . , they hope to look smart and special. , they want to win others admiration and respect. In addition, it makes them feel cool . , we students should hold the right sense of values. We should practice thrift 节俭 in our daily life . , we can donate some pocket money to the Hope Project so that those poor children in rural areas can return to school. , it is the inner beauty rather than our appearance that makes us respectable. Thank you for listening! A. The reasons why they do so are as follows B. Firstly C. In the end D. Moreover E. As far as I am concerned F. Secondly A B C D E F I think, for us children, we should often go home and stay together with our parents though we are busy. Our society should organize all kinds of activities for the seniors to help them live happily. We can build a harmonious society only when all of us care for the aged. As far as I am concerned, for us children, we should often go home and stay together with our parents however busy we are. What s more, our society should organize all kinds of activities for the seniors to help them live a happy life. Only when all of us care for the aged can we build a harmonious society. 5 、 advanced expressions 高级表达 6 、 various sentence patterns 丰富的句式 Compare: 5、Advanced expressions: adj. 聪明的、脑筋好的 clever smart wise intelligent adj. 重要的 important crucial significant adv. 现在 now at the moment nowadays at present v. 喜欢 like enjoy be into be fond of adv. 附近 near next to in the neighborhood f of adj. 快乐 的 happy joyful be on the top of the world 6 、丰富 的句式： 常用到的句型结构） 利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思， 能增加文章的文采。 e.g. He is a kind boy. How kind he is. What a kind boy he is. 感叹句 强调句 e.g. The young boy helped the old granny. It was this young boy that helped the old granny. e.g. I hope you can come if possible. I do hope you can come if possible. e.g. You can solve this problem only in this way. Only in this way can you solve this problem. 倒装句 e.g. In my opinion, Jiangkou Senior High School should be a place. We can improve ourselves in Jiangkou Senior High school. In my opinion, Jiangkou Senior High school should be a place where we can improve ourselves. 定语从句 e.g. Time passed quickly before we knew it. The moment we reached the farm, we got down to harvesting. So long as we work harder at our lessons, we ll catch up sooner or later. 各种状语从句 7、Proverb 有关 锻炼身体 健康 减肥 的作文: 食如其人： 一天一苹果医生远离我： 有关 努力 奋斗 理想 的作文： 没有付出就没有收获： 活到老学到老： 熟能生巧： You are what you eat. One apple a day keeps the doctor away. No pains, no gains. One is never too old to learn. Practice makes perfect. Conclusion: What does a good writing require? 1. A neat face 卷面整洁 2. Complete contents 内容完整 3. Well organized 结构合理 4. Proper linking words 使用恰当的连接词 5. Advanced expressions 使用 高级词汇 6. Various sentence patterns 用较丰富的句式 7. Proverbs 使用谚语 ASSESSMENT structure Is the essay divided into parts? 分段 Does each part have a topic sentence? content Are all the details stated? 内容完整 Is everything to the point 切题? Language Does the writer use any linking words? Are there any mistakes? 语法词汇 Is there any advanced vocabulary （高级词汇）? Are there any good sentence patterns （句式）? Let s improve it: 假设你是李华，你的美国笔友Linda来信说她家搬到了一个新城市，她几乎没有朋友，每天除了上课就是在家上网，感觉很孤独。请你给她写一封信， 劝她多结交朋友，参加社会活动。 1、格式 2、参加社会活动： take social activities Dear Linda, I know it s hard to start a new life in a strange city. However, just staying at home doing nothing but surfing the Internet is not good for you. You d better go out and join in some social activities. By doing t his, you can get to know more people around. Besides, it would be a good idea to help others if possible and show them you are open and friendly as well. With time going on, people will know you better and like to mak e friends with you. Best wishes! Yours, Li Hua